by robbieagray » Sat Sep 20, 2008 11:28 am
I kind of like this story compared to the first draft. I must say that even though we may only have four ages we should include at least two D’ni locations as well as more information on the Bahro situation. Like we could have records of Bahro sightings in some of the four new ages as well as a few areas damaged by the Bahro Nekisahl. Thus creating some new and interesting puzzles for the game environment as well as shed some light on the Bahro story. Now I’m not saying that in the story we resolve the issue with the Bahro but rather acknowledge it.
Also if you like you could use my character as a filler in for the person who hands the book to the Charleston group. It could be that Robbieagray was being blackmailed by the Charleston group for some reason. Maybe Robbieagray hacked some DRC files and by some mysterious means the group found out and forced him to give them a book otherwise have the information come out and Robbieagray be exiled from the guild (true is that I have an account on both the guild of Maintainers and the guild of Writers). Perhaps later in the story Robbieagray has to help the guild with the Charleston group situation in order to redeem himself from his past sins, and maybe in the end he ends up paying for it.
We should also refer to other ages in UCC in order to bring the story home. Like the could be documents that discuss the Charleston group’s plan to make a base, resource gathering site on the ages Eder Gira and Teledahn but these plans were later canceled due to the DRC’s protest and the resentment of other Explorers.
Now I am not sure precisely if you are saying that you only want there to be four ages because your storyline only has four ages or if you don’t have anymore ideas for other ages and don’t won’t to work on making more. If you need any more age ideas just simply ask. I am sure that there are plenty of others out there who wouldn’t mind seeing there own ages seen under the hood of this storyline and would be glad to submit age ideas that they may have already created.
There are also other people here in the GoAW who would like to see their ages in an upcoming “Expansionâ€, “Moduleâ€, or Shard. So would it be all right if other ages were featured in the same Shard as yours but weren’t necessarily having any connection to the storyline. Perhaps they could have side stories that could move right beside your own story.
And if you need creature ideas or concept art for any of the creatures in one of your four ages just PM me or post a comment.
The Bahro shall rise once more. All hail the Bahro!