
Eder Bahrehltahn - Warning! Large Pictures and Spoilers!
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BAD is as good as he gets
Re: Eder Bahrehltahn - Warning! Large Pictures and Spoilers!
5TheStranger5 wrote:"I fear i cannot write much here of what has transgressed- but if i do not write it here then where? i have to record this somewhere; our ancient and sacred society must be preserved as it always has been....."
Well-written, but I think the word you're looking for is "transpired," which means "occurred." "Transgressed" means "passed beyond a boundary" or "acted in violation of law." Then again, I don't know the context intimately - you might have picked exactly the right word, for all I know.
Remember to capitalize the word "I," as well.
No offense meant at all - I just think the phrasing is quite good and it would be a shame to miss something as simple as the above.
Oh, yeah, and the Age looks nice, too.

Re: Eder Bahrehltahn - Warning! Large Pictures and Spoilers!
Chacal wrote:The cables seem very bright in those pictures. I would expect cables to become quickly dark as they reach up to the ceiling.
Cables? What cables?

Also, I didn't like the way the stalagmite and stalagtite looked, so I re-modelled/textured them.
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Re: Eder Bahrehltahn - Warning! Large Pictures and Spoilers!
"The tunnel where our order has gathered for thousands of years was conceived during the times of the first great leaders, and the tunnel Book has passed from each leader to the next. The chain has never been broken, and our wisest elder still possesses the Book. The others have been talking about him as of late, referring to him as "our good friend". He has become a respected and wise leader of our order; hopefully I will get the chance to meet him soon. He only appears at the times of the gatherings, and none know of where he truly resides....."
~Journal Of Ash'taroth
~Journal Of Ash'taroth
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"The reason for such secrecy is quite clear now. The rest of D'ni simply wouldn't understand; their minds are clouded with disbelief. The more I grow towards the group the further I grow away from my home here. My family's beliefs reside where my own are, and so they too have sacrificed in order to know more of our great order, and of our Maker. I know they will be beside me in the years to come, and for that I am thankful....."
~Journal Of Ash'taroth
~Journal Of Ash'taroth
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Rever The Maker ~ Cherish The Made
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A facinating Age Stranger keep up the good work.
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Interesting with a backstory here! And I really like the texturing of the age shown in these pics. Looks like a fascinating age coming up 

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That overhanging pathway looks like it may tempt a jumping party to see if it is secure.
The journal excerpts sound great, Stranger.
The journal excerpts sound great, Stranger.
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"Today while we were gathered, I saw him. The one that everyone has been talking about. I was told to address him as Shetehntahn, but also heard many call out to him as the "White Figure". I asked one of my order what this meant, and he told me about the paintings I had seen lining the walls of the tunnel. Sure enough, the great Shetehntahn is in them; portrayed always as a figure painted in white. Many great murals and carvings have been added to the tunnel to honor his wisdom, which flows from and leads us closer to the Maker of worlds..."
~Journal Of Ash'taroth
~Journal Of Ash'taroth
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Rever The Maker ~ Cherish The Made
Rever The Maker ~ Cherish The Made